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So I have a storyline I made for WWE Raw upcoming this week that plays out from what all happened last week and stuff. First I would just like to say It is long because it is a true storyline i wrote, I have an incredible passion for wrestling and like to get opinions on my material so you do not have to read it. There for please don't comment and say its too long to read, if you can't or don't like to read just pass this by. For those of you that do read I would love for you to tell me what you think of the storyline, its cool if you hate it I just need feedback.

S0... IF CM Punk HAD to be punished for the fan incident and IF he HAD to lose the WWE Title and I'm not saying any of us want him to but if that were the case would you rather it happen like this??? I'm sure its better then another title reign for Cena!

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VIDEO PACKAGE - Shows last weeks raw & Cm Punk & Vince talking. Audio is then spliced in of the fans booing or chanting Cm sucks and then it shows Punk backhanding the fan, immediatley after it shows Vince angry telling punk "you're gonna fight me tonight, Im gonna kick your butt!" to make it look like he was defending the fan that punk hit. Shows vince beating down on him and then shows the end of the match. The end of the video package replays Punk hitting the fan a couple times.


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*Fades in from black*


Cm Punk is in a suit in the middle of the ring.


Cm Punk - "first off i would just like to say that this is not Cm Punk the showman speaking right now, right now this is Phil Brooks the person, the human being. As a human being I make mistakes just like the rest of you but that is no excuse for how i acted last week, my emotions got the better of me & I lost my temper just like alot of other human beings do from time to time. i was being heckled by some unruly fans & I lost my temper while at the same time not looking where i was swinging because I was trying to save face. I lashed out without thinking & when you don't think you make mistakes & the mistake I had was hitting an innocent person in the face. Even if I had hitten the right person that doesn't make it right, the truth is there is NO excuse for what i did last week. You great fans pay your hard earned dollars to come here for a show & to get entertained not to get attacked by me or anyone else (tears coming down face) & I am so ashamed as a performer & a human being for what I did, I pride myself on being a professional & being the best at what I do but last week I was not & I let all that I have accomplished in my career go down the tubes in a few seconds, it was stupid & you will never know how sorry I truly am. How sorry I am for me as I feel pretty pathetic, to the fans, to everyone who has seen it but most of all to (Name of victim) I should have been able to handle myself in a better manor its what we are trained to do for so many years... I come out here not to look for sympothy & not to try to save my name but only to try to do whats responsable & right & just tell you that I willingly take any punsihment I have coming & how sorry I really am & thats the truth. This isn't part of the entertainment this is very very real & what happened last week was very very real & you fans should never have to surcome to that kind of danger when coming to a WWE or any event. At this time I would like to invite Vince McMahon who is my boss in real life down to the ring to hear what he has to say to me & if he and the WWE has decided on how I will be accountable for my actions I would like you all to know & see that as well because you deserve to be justified & you desearve respect so Vince if you'd please....."

(CM Punk (Phil brooks) breaking Kayfabe and maybe kind of showing his face side again)


*Vince McMahons entrance music hits*

*Mcmahon comes to the ring looking angry*



Vince McMahon - "Hello ladies & gentleman my name is Vince McMahon & I am the owner of World Wrestling Entertainment & I would just like to say how deeply sorry I am that I let this happen at one of my events.


*Apologizes more & talks very seriously to Phil Brooks about how he was wrong & how he is ashamed with him & how he will be repremended*



*Vince tells the crowd that Phil Brooks will have a small fine to pay and be suspended for 30 days effective at the end of this broadcast with the exception of the HIAC PPV. He also mentions that WWE's Champion should not be someone who carries themselves in such a manor & that tonight CM Punk will defend his title.*



Vince - "Usually what would happen in a circumstance like this is I would give an oppertunity to 1 of our superstars that I think is deserving as of late & maybe have some sort of tournament and all that but with such a serious situation as is this I have decided not to BS all of you wonderful people out there & not to waste your valuble time & just tell you how it is & just tell you who those superstars will be, keeping in mind of course that 1 of our most deserving superstars is sidlined right now with injuries that being John cena. So then tonight CM Punk, as a punishment for your actions you will be defending your title against The MIZ ...Rey Mysterio ...& Dolph Ziggler in a Fatal4Way!"


*Vince McMahon apoligizes again, says thankyou & goodnight*


COMMERCIAL


*Comes back from commercial shows what just happened*



MICHAEL COLE: "Well ladies & gentlemen we just got the official word that also tonight John Cena! will be making a live appearance via satiliette from his home to address his opinions on what has happened on Raw last week. Its all over the news & has made every headline in just 1 week & live tonight! We will find out just how John Cena feels about the whole situation"



*Some where in the middle of the show Cena makes his appearance Via Satilette*


JOHN CENA - *Looks very angry and yelling* "What do I think about what happened last week? I think it was down right wrong! I think I'm going to do something about it! CM Punk is an evil man & I do not for 1 solitary second believe anything that comes out of his mouth! He does not care about anybody but himself & he is not a man at all! He is not fit to wear that gold around his waist like he comes out & says! Cm Punk you want respect!? Well did you show our great fans MY LOYAL FANS!! respect last week when you assaulted one of them just for simply coming to see me! Cm Punk if its the last thing I do I will make sure that we never have to see you come out here with that belt again & talk about being the best in the world after the disrespect you showed 1 my fans last week. THOSE PEOPLE ARE SO LOYAL TO ME & I INTEND TO BE EVERY BIT AS LOYAL TO THEM! ...Yeah I know I'm hurt! but when we get to Hell In A Cell I am gonna defend the WWE Universe like they should be defended because when you mess with them YOU! MESS! WITH! ME! & I WILL have (Fan that got punched) IN MY CORNER TO MAKE SURE THAT YOU GET EVERY LAST THING THAT IS COMING TO YOU! THESE GREAT PEOPLE DESERVE A REAL CHAMPION! ...Mark my words Punk! ...Your reign as WWE Champion is over. ...If its the last thing I do"



*Bunch of other crap happens*



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MAIN EVENT TIME:

Its around the end of the match Miz is laying outside the ring hurt. Punk & Ziggler are teaming up on Mysterio. Double move to mysterio. Punk turns to the booing fans to flip them off & Ziggler immediatley tries to roll him up for the pin but Punk kicks out. Miz slides in, kicks Dolph as he gets up, scoop slam! Cm hits Miz with the GTS! Mysterio runs at Punk & dropkicks him. Mysterio goes to the top rope but dolph hops up & hits Rey's leg off making him lose his balance. Dolph picks Rey up & throws him into the ropes but Rey bounces off with a hurricanrana. Ziggler lands on the 2nd rope setting him up for a 619, Rey goes for it but Dolph ducks just in time & roles out on to the apron, he stands up but now Punk is up & running at Rey with a flying knee but Rey ducks & Ziggler gets cracked right in the face knocking him off the apron to the outside & on his way down smacking his head off the announcers desk. Miz hits Rey with the skull crushing finaly from behind, goes for the pin but Punk kicks him in the back. They fight for a bit until Rey is up & Miz ends up getting CM down but then Rey dropkicks Miz setting him up for a 619 on the 2nd rope. Then as punk is getting up Rey gives him a couple fore arms but CM gives him a thumb to the eye & ends up hitting him with the GTS! Punk starts showing off to the crowd! and walking around all cocky, he picks Rey up off the mat laughing ...



MICHAEL COLE - "What the heck is he doing!? Why doesn't he just pin Rey right now he's got him right where he wants him! Miz is down, Zigglers hurt badly out here at ringside & ..Oh ...Oh I see what he's doing he's mocking Rey. He's setting him up for the 619 as well right beside The Miz hahaha this is great!"


Punk is about to copy Rey's 619 & hit both Rey & Miz with a 619 when Cena comes bolting down to the ring & jumps up on the apron. Ziggler is starting to get up.


MICHAEL COLE - "What the heck is Cena doing I thought he was home in Boston!? ...Well at least dolphs starting to come around I was a little worried for a few minutes there"


Punk & Cena are arguing & Cena looks very angry while the ref is trying to break them apart. The Miz is starting to get up off the 2nd rope but BAM! Gets hit in the face with the MITB case from Ziggler! & then all of the sudden BAM! again to Rey! He slides in with the breifcase & is creeping very VERY slowly towards Punk, as slow as he can so he doesn't get spotted by the ref or Punk.


MICHAEL COLE: - "What is he doing he could just pin Miz or Mysterio right now and win the WWE Title! Pin them Dolph, Pin them!"


Ziggler is just standing there holding the case motioning it up & down like he's ready to swing. Punk Finally turns around & Ziggler tosses the case out of the ring at the same time & mouths the words "I don't need that ...IM DOLPH ZIGGLER!!!!" You can hear it through the whole arena & then he HITS PUNK WITH THE BIGGEST ZIG ZAG YOU EVER SEEN! Doplh goes to the top rope & hits a humungas splash across all 3 laying men in the middle of the ring 1, 2, 3. Dolph Ziggler is the new WWE champion!

He & Vickie are celebrating crying & all that good stuff! This goes on for like 4 minutes. They go to the outside Dolph is kneeling on the ground in happiness, yelling at the fans "I AM THE BEST IN THE WORLD! I AM THE BEST IN THE WORLD!"


Punk is starting to come around finally as the fans are booing. He is in disbelid as he see's Cena smirking on the outside "I told you" we hear Cena say as the ref points up the ramp to try and get Cena to go backstage "What? I did tell him Mike! ..I did tell him" Cena is talking to Ref Mike Chiotta as Punk is furious & flies over the top rope landing on Cena (in a way not to hurt his arm too much) starts pounding his face. Punk gets up as Cena is holding his arm. CM grabs a chair. We hear him saying "Thats it! I've had it" He swings & hits the steps with it! .."I'm gonna finish this loser once & for all!" The ref is trying to stop him as CM spreads Cena's arm across the ramp for a clean chair shot to re-injure him. He lifts the chair up slowly over his head as high as it can go but here comes Orton running down to try & stop all of this only to get a kick to his gut by Punk & a chair shot to the back! Again he lifts it up to hit Cena but here comes Sheamus & Punk swings wildly to hit him but Sheamus ducks & punches the chair out of his hand then grabs Punk & tosses him into the ring. Sheamus rolls in & throws CM off the ropes & he comes back & gets a brouge kick! Miz then hits Sheamus with a fore arm to the back but Sheamus just turns around & clobbers him. Then he goes to pick Miz up & BAM!! Ziggler hits Sheamus with the Leg drop to the back of the head (FameAser) Ziggler runs out side of the ring looking all over the place frantically! "WHERE IS IT!" "WHERE IS IT!" looks under the ring apron, then runs on the other side of the ring where vickie is pointing to "WHERE DID I PUT THAT DAM..." THEN he finds it the MITB breifcase He throws it to the ref & screams as loud as he possibly can with that scratchy voice of his "RING THAT DAM BELL!" Ref signals for the bell ziggler snatches the case back slides in & Sheamus is just starting to get up all groggy as we see Ziggler standing there calm for a moment & slowly turns to the camera as it zooms up on him & he shrugs his shoulders & in a cocky way says "I lied" He throws the Case up high in the air & jumps up dropkicking it into Sheamus' face & pins him 1, 2, 3!


Raw goes off the air with CM Punk crying because he is now suspended & beltless & Dolph Ziggler is standing in the middle of the ring with the World Title over 1 shoulder & the WWE Title over the other.

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I can believe that I read all of this lol.Anyway.
I like the story itself the thing is that I'm not a big fan of storys or promos that are breaking kayfabe(unless it's something like Lawler getting a heart attack).It's just a bit mindless(probably the wrong word lol) that Punk is having a promo as Phil Brooks,being sorry for what he has done to the fan and 2 hours later wrestles as CM Punk acting all cocky.Also I don't think that the MITB winner is able to cash in for both,the WWE and WH championship.But still,this sounds better than some of the things we have seen from the WWE in the last couple of months lol.

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I can believe that I read all of this lol.Anyway.
I like the story itself the thing is that I'm not a big fan of storys or promos that are breaking kayfabe(unless it's something like Lawler getting a heart attack).It's just a bit mindless(probably the wrong word lol) that Punk is having a promo as Phil Brooks,being sorry for what he has done to the fan and 2 hours later wrestles as CM Punk acting all cocky.Also I don't think that the MITB winner is able to cash in for both,the WWE and WH championship.But still,this sounds better than some of the things we have seen from the WWE in the last couple of months lol.


He didn't cash it in for both titles, didn't you read it? lol he only cashes it in at the end for the World title, he was previously put into a WWE title match by Vince with 3 other guys. Also yes thats the point he says its not the showman talking its Phil Brooks right in his promo and then he goes back to being a showman for the "show" after he has apoligized in real life because what happened WAS real.

Thanks for your feedback though :)

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I can believe that I read all of this lol.Anyway.
I like the story itself the thing is that I'm not a big fan of storys or promos that are breaking kayfabe(unless it's something like Lawler getting a heart attack).It's just a bit mindless(probably the wrong word lol) that Punk is having a promo as Phil Brooks,being sorry for what he has done to the fan and 2 hours later wrestles as CM Punk acting all cocky.Also I don't think that the MITB winner is able to cash in for both,the WWE and WH championship.But still,this sounds better than some of the things we have seen from the WWE in the last couple of months lol.


He didn't cash it in for both titles, didn't you read it? lol he only cashes it in at the end for the World title, he was previously put into a WWE title match by Vince with 3 other guys. Also yes thats the point he says its not the showman talking its Phil Brooks right in his promo and then he goes back to being a showman for the "show" after he has apoligized in real life because what happened WAS real.

Thanks for your feedback though :)

Oh sorry,I forgot that Ziggler was in a match.
Yes I understood that,but that's exactly what I didn't like.It's generally silly to break kayfabe at a show imo.But like I said the rest is really good.

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You sir, should be hired by Creative.

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You sir, should be hired by Creative.


Thank you, not the first time I've heard that I have a bunch of old storylines I made for previous angles in WWE that were happening at the time but now they might be a little hard to remember what was going on at that time. I may post them and see what you guys think of those though.

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You did a great job!

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Well it's much better than anything WWE come up with these days.

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Awesome storyline! Would love to see this in real life.





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